Ok, my (somewhat grumpy) thoughts:
WAY too much verbiage.
s/An easy and stress-free way of joining Mastodon and the Fediverse/How to sign up on Mastodon/
“Easy” implies it’s hard; “stress-free” implies it’s stressful. “Fediverse”… c’mon, you can be geekier, but it’ll take a little effort. Don’t provide solutions to problems; that implies the problems exist.
We’re after people who really don’t want to think, right? (https://bookshop.org/p/books/don-t-make-me-think-revisited-a-common-sense-approach-to-web-usability-steve-krug/ad7b7eb124318416?ean=9780321965516&next=t)
Drop “non-corporate”. No screeds, not even by quiet reference. (Maybe assume whoever’s referring somebody to the website has already given that pitch.)
Make an animation. People broadcasting messages and other people tuning in. Maybe like little radio waves. Then zoom out: that’s one server. Each server is its own radio station and other servers tune in. (Maybe just show two or three servers and draw lines between them.) Zoom out more: more servers and lines, maybe one connected by only one line, maybe two in a disconnected cluster with angry lines between them (say, red instead of blue). Maybe little lightning bolts radiating from the angry servers.
People love happy, silly (-ish) cartoons. No, I don’t know how to do it, but I bet I could figure it out. Something something SVG, I’m guessing. No, I’m not volunteering.
s/follows and followers/friends and contacts/
More unnecessary geekery.
On the full list of servers, I’d make (Server Type) the last button. Newcomers probably don’t care, and their nephew who’s guiding them through this can point them to that button if it’s important to them (the nephew, that is, probably not the newcomer). (Ok, that last part was probably unnecessarily sarcastic.)
Actually, the rest of this looks pretty good. I can tell you’ve put in a lot of effort removing everything that isn’t elephant.
Although… If somebody clicks “show me a good server” and signs up and then clicks “ok I signed up, now what?” without going much farther, you’ve done well. 🙂
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